January 1, 2013 Writing Prompt:
"An old saying takes on new meaning when a woman sees, literally, 'what the cat dragged in.'"
"An old saying takes on new meaning when a woman sees, literally, 'what the cat dragged in.'"
“Patience’s Venture”
Hepzibah patted the white lace
antimacassar back into place on top of the cushioned armchair. Life flowed so
much more smoothly when everything knew its place, and stayed in it. She
glanced out the window behind the chair, noticed a spot of smudge, and lifted
her apron to wipe at it. Crouching on the window seat and angling her head to
check that the smudge had dissolved, Hepzibah heard a scratching noise from
across the room. “Old age--hearing noises that don’t exist,” she thought to
herself. At eighty, she occasionally saw shadows in corners, even foggy mists
in the hall sometimes after she had climbed into bed. Well, she was an elderly
woman, long-widowed, living in a house built before the 19th century’s
“fin de siècle.” Old houses settled; so do old people, she thought.
Nevertheless, she stood up
creakingly, vanished smudge now forgotten, and in the process of unkinking
those pesky knee joints, glanced back out the window. Something just out of
reach at the left side of the back garden caught her eye, a smidgen of colour.
As she turned her head, she realized whatever lay in the back left corner was
far more than just a smidgen; a whole wide streak of different colours lay in
the grass, near the neglected side border of perennials she had not had the
energy to replant this season.
Predominantly red, the splash looked rather like
one of the abstract paintings she sometimes viewed on a public broadcasting
channel. Creakily, she stepped toward the door, determined to see what
Patience, her tomcattish Persian, had dragged into their yard this time, when
her attention was again caught by that intermittent but now more determined
scratching. Hepzibah noticed now it came from the inside of the closet door,
the outdoors closet she had not opened in years, since she last dusted Arnold’s
golf club set, right after he’d passed eight years earlier. Could Patience have
managed to open the closet door, and then get himself stuck when the door blew
shut? It didn’t seem likely, as the windows and doors had been closed, but
Patience did have a cat door in the kitchen, so maybe a breeze could have
entered.
As she reached for the closet’s
door knob, Hepzibah suddenly realized that the colours and shape on the back
lawn, even at that distance (her house had been blessed with a very long rear
lawn) so much resembled a film scene she had once inadvertently seen, a preview
she thought, while returning from the kitchen one evening with a cup of tea,
intending to settle in to watch “Coronation Street.” A shiver ran down her
spine, but she bravely turned the knob of the closet on her left, yanking open
the door to find Patience, indeed—crouched over the bloody remains.
This rocks! I love it. :) Great work Mallory!
ReplyDeleteThank you tremendously! Lori, you might not believe this-but this is the first time, other than posting in my Portfolio at writing.com that I have EVER "come out of the closet" and let anyone read my writing! How freeing! What a New Year resolution! and all thanks to your Challenge!
DeleteEnjoyed your response to the prompt! It's quite fun, and I expect many different ideas to pop up!
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